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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of businesses in the UK who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of businesses in the UK who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart generates
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data on how much
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 kinds of
businesses
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 in England were attracted by social
media
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 over the period of 4 years. It is apparent that large
businesses
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 had always been at the highest rank in all years, except for 2015,
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 in small
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 social
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 was not so popular.  Holding a high level in 2012,2013 and 2014( just slightly below 80
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), the close relationship of big
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 with social
media
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, reached its peak in 2016, though with a reasonable drop ( 50 %) in 2015.
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, 2016 was a year when all
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kinds
 of
businesses
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 got an immense impact from social
media
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.
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 small
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 in 2012 were not ruling with the help of
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social
media
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 so much,( it raised significantly by 2016, 2012 was not a successful plan for all
businesses
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words businesses, media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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