The charts below sjow the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting ajd reporting main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below sjow the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. 

Summarise the information by selecting ajd reporting main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic displays the distribution of
water
used across various sectors in percentage by 6 different
regions
in the world - North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, in all the areas, except for North
America
and
Europe
, the main and major
water
usage
is for
agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector.
While
households utilize the least portion of
water
in those 2 exceptional
regions
, the least
water
usage
in other
regions
are
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for industrial purposes. Regarding the areas in which
majority
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of their hydro resources are allocated to agriculture and farming, Central
Asia
occupies the first place with 88% of its
water
used by agricultural processes, followed by Africa with 84% and South East
Asia
with 81%.
While
South
America
uses 71% of its
water
for farming, only 32% to 39% of all
water
usage
is distributed to agriculture in North
America
and
Europe
.
On the other hand
, the
regions
that used
least
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amount of
water
for domestic purposes, North
America
and
Europe
, are the ones that spend the most
water
for industrial processes , with 13% and 15% respectively. 
On the contrary
, the smallest portion of
overall
water
usage
is for industrial processes in the other
regions
whose
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most
water
utilizations are for agriculture, ranging from 5 to 12
percent
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per cent
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.
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