The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data represents the places where
dance
classes are held and different kind
of class categories, Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
the
younger generation of a township in Australia are participating nowadays.
Change preposition
in the
Overall
, a large group
of the
teenagers are attending classes in private studios, Correct article usage
apply
while
a minimum of them are going to a college-based studio. The majority of children under 11 has
chosen ballet Correct subject-verb agreement
have
dance
, whereas
the modern type is the favorite
type of the age Change the spelling
favourite
group
11-16.
Private studios account for the predominant share of the total, with just under half. Conversely
, college-based studios have a minimal percentage of students at 10%. Moreover
, school halls (after-school) and community halls & other
comprise 24% and 18% of youth, respectively.
The ballet Correct pronoun usage
others
dance
is more popular among the age group
under 11 years, numbering at over 600, while
nearly half of that number is in other
Change the wording
another group
other groups
group
. However
, the modern type has the exact opposite trend of
Change preposition
apply
Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
, which is over 500 are
from the Unnecessary verb
apply
group
between 11 and 16 years, and 300 students are under 11 years.
Correct word choice
old.
Furthermore
, the tap dance
class has over 800 participants, contributing equally from both age groups.Submitted by prabodyagamage on
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