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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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There is no doubt that most adults spend
their
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 majority of
time
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their time
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 working,
hence
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 the
level
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 of satisfaction and enjoyment at
work
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 has a great impact
in
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on
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one’s
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overall
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life
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 quality. In my opinion, personal
interest
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 and the
level
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 of achievement
contributes
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 most to whether the
person
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 is enjoying their
work
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.
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, realistically, not everyone is able to get a
job
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 of their choice, it depends on
one’s
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 ability and what resources that they have
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.
Firstly
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, personal
interest
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 contributes a big part to the
level
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 of enjoyment at
work
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. People who are able to
work
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 in the field of their
interest
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 often find
job
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 tasks easier and time would pass quicker for them to finish
work
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.
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, if a
person
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who
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apply
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hate
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hates
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 animals but they have to
work
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 in a zoo, feeding and looking after different types of animals for long hours every day, their
level
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 of happiness at
work
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 would be very low compared to another
person
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 who
love
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 animals. Another factor of
job
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 satisfaction would be the
level
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 of achievement. Sometimes, even though a
person
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 is not working in what they are interested in
but
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it is what they are good at and they achieved a high
level
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 of success,
such
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 as earning a high amount of commission and salary or being the leader of the company.
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satisfactory
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 and enjoyment
level
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 at
work
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 is essential for
one’s
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life
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 quality, not everyone is lucky enough to
work
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 in a
job
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 that they
enjoyed
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 and has a high
level
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 of attainment. The most significant reason would be a
person
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’s ability to reach the
job
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 requirement.
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, a
person
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maybe
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may be
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 very interested
to become
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in becoming
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 a doctor and think that saving lives would be their
life
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 goal,
however
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, they may not be able to achieve the academic requirement to study medical science
in
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at
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 University so they would never be qualified as a doctor.
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, sometimes it
also
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 depends on
one’s
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 resources to whether they can get a
job
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 that they would like. To illustrate, if the
person
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 is the main income source for their family, they may need to
work
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 in a
job
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 that can earn
high
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a high
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 salary but not a
job
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 that they
liked
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.
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, personal
interest
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 and the
level
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 of achievement at
work
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 are important for people’s
overall
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life
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 quality.
Nevertheless
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, not everyone is lucky enough to get the ideal
job
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 based on their ability and resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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