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r essay on the topic of dairy production by the world’s top 3 producers from the real IELTS exam.

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This
 bar chart illustrates diary production between their famous produces among 3 countries .
overall
, It is evident that
milk
 ,cheese and butter were overwhelmingly produced in UE , India, Us .
while
 China is one of the most famous
milk
 providers. In terms of
milk
 production EU had one of the greatest producers, followed by India and
lastly
 was the US. For other products like Cheese
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 UE was still at the top of the list, but at
this
 point US got the second position and ended with lower products from Brazil. For about butter, India surpassed others by being the first and biggest producer, which was
then
 followed by the EU and the US. when it comes to talking about
milk
 powred , china got the highest position among others, which received others respectively
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structure
Improve the introduction by clearly stating what the essay will cover and the information the chart provides.
structure
Provide a conclusion that summarizes the key points discussed in the essay.
coherence
Use connecting words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
support
Ensure each main point is clearly detailed and supported by data from the chart.
clarity
Use precise language and correct any minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The essay effectively identifies the main producers in various dairy categories.
task achievement
Good comparison of different countries' production levels in different dairy products.

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