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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
reppresented
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represents
percentage
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the percentage
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 of the recommended daily amount of fruit and
vegetables
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vegetable
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 percentage of the population in
the
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apply
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UK consumers in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
Ovearall
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Overall
,
Women's
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the Women's
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 chart shows the highest peak in all of
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this
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these
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 years,
while
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population
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the population
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 of
men's
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men
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 and children was much lower.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 Women's consumption in 2006 accounted for 32%,
however
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 in 2002 and 2010 the percentage of
consuming
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consumption
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precented
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per cent
 26 and 27
whith
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with
a small differences
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small differences
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. Moving to the daily
reccomending
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recommending
 to
men's
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men
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 and children
of consuming
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to consume
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 fruits and vegetables.Men's 10% higher than children. In 2006,
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the recomendations
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recomendations
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recommendations
both
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for both
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 of
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this
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these
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 two categories increased slightly to approximately 5-6%,
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besides
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and
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 both populations dropped to 24% and 14% in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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