The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The charts Illustrate information on the location and types of
dance
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classes
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youngster
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in a town in Australia are currently attending .
overall
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, the highest
assuming
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locatian
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location
of
dance
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classes
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is private students which
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48%
however
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,the lowest accessible location is
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College-based
studios which is 10% .
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the ballet types of
dance
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classes
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by
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under 11 is highest which is 600 in
number
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and lowest is
modern
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a modern
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type of
dance
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classes
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by
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under 11 is 300 in
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.
furthermore
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,the highest modern type of
dance
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classes
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by
11
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the 11
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to 16
age
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group
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is 500 in
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.
whereas
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,the lowest ballet type of
classes
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by 11 to 16 is 300 in
numbers
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. It is quite evident
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from
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foom
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the chart of
Location
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of
dance
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classes
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, that the most
classes
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are held in private studios
that
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is
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48%
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,
the
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18% Class are held in community halls as well
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.
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the
classes
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are
ase
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are
also
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taken in school halls (after school
classes
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) is 24%
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,the
rarely
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classes
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are held in
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classes are held in
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college based studios which
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10%
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to that, the highest
ballet
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dance
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classes
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by
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for
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under
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the under
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11
age
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group
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is
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are
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600 and
lowest
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the lowest
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by
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for
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11
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the 11
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to 16
age
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groups
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is 400 in
number
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.
futuermore
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Furthermore
,the lowest
modern
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number of modern
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dance
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classes
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by
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in
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under
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11
age
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group
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is
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are
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300 in numbers.
wheareas
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whereas
,the highest modern
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by 11 to 15
age
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group
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is
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are
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520 in numbers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, number, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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