Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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at the current university in England, who Use synonyms
speaks
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speak
in
different Change preposition
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languages
except English, in 2000 and 2010.
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students
, speaking Spanish only, Use synonyms
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have
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for
5 - 10%, but the Change preposition
by
amount
of individuals who speak Change the quantifier
number
in
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apply
two
other Use synonyms
languages
stood stable Use synonyms
on
10%.
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Firstly
, the Linking Words
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students
who can speak only in Spanish is 30%, Correct quantifier usage
number of students
meanwhile
the ones who can't speak in another language(except all mentioned ones) is Add a comma
meanwhile,
two
thirds(20%). Use synonyms
Firstly
, spoken Linking Words
two
other Use synonyms
languages
and only German by Use synonyms
students
, Use synonyms
also
only French and Linking Words
another
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other
languages
were spoken equally, 10% and 15%, respectively.
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" and "Use synonyms
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languages
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percents
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percent
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