Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate

The singular verb illustrates does not appear to agree with the plural subject charts. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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a percentage of British
students
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at the current university in England, who
speaks
Correct subject-verb agreement
speak

It seems that the verb speaks does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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in
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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different
languages
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except English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is explicit that
students
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, speaking Spanish only,
is
Verb problem
have

There may be a verb use issue here.

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the highest statistics and
also
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experienced a climb from 30% to 35%.
Besides
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other
remained
Wrong verb form
remaining

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb remained. Consider changing it.

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data experienced almost the same amount of changes,
by
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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increasing and decreasing
for
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by

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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5 - 10%, but the
amount
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number

It appears that the quantifier the amount does not fit with the countable noun individuals. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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of individuals who speak
in
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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two
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other
languages
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

stood stable
on
Change preposition
at

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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10%.
Firstly
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, the
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

students
Correct quantifier usage
number of students

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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who can speak only in Spanish is 30%,
meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase meanwhile. Consider adding a comma.

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the ones who can't speak in another language(except all mentioned ones) is
two
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thirds(20%).
Firstly
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, spoken
two
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other
languages
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and only German by
students
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,
also
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only French and
another
Replace the adjective
other

The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun languages. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.

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languages
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

were spoken equally, 10% and 15%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, it is shown that trends,
such
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as "Spanish only", "
Two
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other
languages
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

" and "
Another
Replace the adjective
Another language
Other languages

The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun languages. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.

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languages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

" rose up to 5
percents
Fix the agreement mistake
percent

It seems that percents may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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: 35%, 15% and 20%, correspondingly. Meantime "French only", "German only" and "No other
languages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

"
stands
Correct subject-verb agreement
stand

It seems that the verb stands does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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on the 10%, each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, firstly".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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