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The chart bewlow shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart bewlow shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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bar chart
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 the difference between the
money
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 spent
of
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in
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 two areas (namely
France
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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) on customer products in 2010.
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, the items which occupied a lot of love
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needs of residents of
France
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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was
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 automobiles. On
other
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the other
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 hand, people in both countries spent
least
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the least
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money
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 buying perfume.
And the
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 most significant difference is
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the expenses
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expenses
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expense
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on
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 cameras. The outgoing costs of the
UK
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usually
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are usually
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 higher than the
British
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, except
the
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 spending on perfume Looking at the graph in a more detailed view, start with spending on cars, which was bought by French consumers recorded at 400
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of
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pounds
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,
while
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 that in
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UK
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the UK
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 was slightly higher at 450
thousand
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of
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pounds
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, it
also
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 was the product that
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British
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the British
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 and French dwellers buy the most .
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, the number of expenditures on
computer
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computers
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 in
France
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 and the
UK
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 was nearly equal at 300 and about 350
thousand
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of
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pounds
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 respectively. The
British
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 seem to like reading more than the French, spending 400
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of
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pounds
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 on books, which was 100
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of
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pounds
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 higher than the French. As far as the chart is given, 200
thousand
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of
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pounds
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 is
money
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 used on scent by
consumer
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consumers
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 in
France
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 in comparison with about 150 of that of the
British
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.
Then
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, there was a remarkable distinction between the amount of
money
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 people
in
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had in
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 the
UK
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 and in
France
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. The former at 400
thousand
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of
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pounds
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,
in contrast
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, the latter only at 150
thousand
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of
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pounds
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, france, uk, british, thousand, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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