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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans of its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans of its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps demonstrate
city
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the city
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 centre of a small town called Islip now and the future plans
of
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for
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 its development.
Overall
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, in
development
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the development
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plan
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plan,
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 there are several areas which do not exist now. Some places are considered to remain the same in the
plan
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 but others will be changed in size and location. In the future
plan
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, the mall
in
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on
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 the north side of the main
road
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 will be demolished and
it
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apply
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replaced with
bus
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a bus
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 station in
north west
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north-west
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 beside the new shopping centre. It
also
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 a new parking beside a shopping center at the north of the map.The main
road
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 which
exist
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exists
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 now completely destroyed in the new
plan
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 and it is for pedestrians only.
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, the housing now is
the
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on the
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 south side of the shops with
large
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a large
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 area with no limitations but in
new
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the new
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 one the new housing
added
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was added
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 to the
plan
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 which reduced the size of
park
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the park
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. The main
road
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replaced
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was replaced
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 by
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway in the new
plan
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.
However
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, there are two places that have not changed, the school and the housing
that
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is
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are
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 not on the
road
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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