You recently visited a theatre and had an accident there. The staff were very helpful. Write a letter to the manager giving good feedback. In your letter, you should tell: – and describe the accident – how the staff helped you – how similar situations could be prevented in the future.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to provide

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feedback regarding an accident, which

happen

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during my recent visit

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your theatre on Dec 25, 2024. Actually, the accident

occured

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occurred

in the movie theatre hall no. 2. All the spectators were enjoying the movie and suddenly a big light

bust

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out and

catched

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by fire. The flames of fire were falling on the people and the smoke was

spreaded

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all over the hall. To address the issue, the on-duty staff helped people to evacuate the hall

immediently

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immediately

. They

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the ambulance promptly and

announcement

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was made to make sure everyone

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the

buliding

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building

. Which was appreciated by all the visitors.

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, the services were

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top notch

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, there are

few

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suggestion

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which can be helpful to prevent similar issues in future.

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, timely

maintainace

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maintenance

could be done for all the

equipments

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, training sessions could be given to staff members to handle situations before health authorities

arrival

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, everyday fire alarm

run

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could be done to make sure they are working or not. I hope these

measure

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can be useful to make the services

expectional

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exceptional

. Looking forward to

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again and

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your services. Yours faithfully, Waris

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coherence cohesion

Ensure logical structuring by organizing ideas sequentially and logically. The sequence of events during the accident and the subsequent suggestions could be clearer.

task achievement

Address any grammatical or spelling errors for improved clarity and professionalism in your letter.

greeting and closing

Good use of greeting and closing, appropriate for the context of the letter.

suitable writing tone

The writing tone is polite and formal, which is suitable for a letter to a manager.

complete response

The letter provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing each of the required sections.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

200 words

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