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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #companies #factories #employees #countryside
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In
this
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 era,
traffic
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 issues and housing
has
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 become
an
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apply
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major problems in numerous
cities
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.Few
peope
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people
 believe that
,
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 it is vital to transfer some industries,companies and workers to rural areas
for
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to
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 tackle
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this
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 consequences.I totally agree with the statement and I will elaborate on my opinion in detail.
To begin
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 with,citizens are facing some challenges
due to
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traffic
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 issues and overpopulation.It leads to
traffic
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 accidents and congestion
in
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on
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 major roads.
For
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 overcome
this
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,it is required to transfer some multinational companies to the outskirt zone.Gradually,it will aid
to minimize
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in minimizing
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 the population
as well as
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traffic
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 concerns like
traffic
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 jams in
well developed
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well-developed
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cities
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.
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,The government initiate some rules to avoid the construction of
building
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buildings
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 in the centre of town.
This
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 is highly
benefical
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beneficial
 for people to stay safe in the urban regions. Regarding
the
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housing,In
well developed
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well-developed
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cities
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 demand for
the
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housing is rising day by day.
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 is mainly occurring
due to
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 the
cities
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have
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having
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 all the amenities rather than people who live in the
country sides
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countryside
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.
Hence
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 ,it is vital to relocate for better benefit .It is the easiest method to balance between the population in rural and urban zones .
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,tourists from
myraid
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myriad
place
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places
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 like to settle in
less
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a less
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 crowded
area
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areas
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for
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to
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decreaes
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decreases
decrease
 the price
for
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of
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accomodation
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accommodation
 and other kinds of facilities.so,people who prefer to live in
country side
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countryside
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 have some
opputunity
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opportunity
 to live
free
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in free
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 facilities. In conclusion,rural
area
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areas
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is
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are
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 comfortable for downing the demand for
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
.
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 that,it
decline
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 the problems associated
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with congestions
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congestions
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congestion
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.I believe that necessary steps to be taken to move the occupational workers and companies to the village areas.
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Ensure that the main points are supported with specific and relevant examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and cohesive devices to ensure smooth progression of your argument.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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The writer clearly states their opinion and attempts to support it throughout the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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