The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data presented illustrates the different
sources
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used for
energy
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generation
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along with
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a detailed breakdown of sustainable
sources
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in two countries (
Germany
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and
France
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) during 2009.
Overall
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, conventional thermal
energy
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constitutes the most part of all
generation
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sources
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in
Germany
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,
whereas
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in
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France
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, nuclear
energy
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came out on top. It is
also
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worth noting that
Germany
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generated more
electricity
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overall
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compared to
France
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in
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2009. In
Germany
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, out of 560 billion kWh generated, about 60% was through conventional thermal
energy
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,
while
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renewables made up only 17%, the least out of all
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reported. Out of those 17% renewable
electricity
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generation
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, the most dependence was on biomass, as it accounted for 39.3% of total renewable
energy
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generation
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.
In contrast
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,
France
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created most of its
electricity
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using nuclear
energy
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(76%) and depended on conventional thermal
energy
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the least, creating only 10% of its
electricity
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that way. Renewable
energy
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came at 13.7%, which is even less than that of
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Germany’s
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Germany
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, their main usage was hydroelectric
generation
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at 80%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, generation, germany, france, electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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