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The bar charts show household expenditure across four main areas in the UK, Australia and Japan in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar charts show household expenditure across four main areas in the UK, Australia and Japan in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart is demonstrating the individual expenses among four main essentials in the
UK
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,
Australia
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 and
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japan
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Japan
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 in 2013 In general, the
UK
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 and
Japan
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 recorded the highest in housing
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while
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, while
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Australia
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shiwed
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showed
 the healthcare is the highest
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in incomparsion
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incomparsion
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comparison
of
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to
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 the other
toew
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two
 countries.
To begin
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 with, housing
expinditure
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expenditure
 showed close relative percentage in the
UK
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 and
Japan
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 27% and 30% respectively,
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In
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in
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 contrast to
Austrailia
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Australia
 showed
percentage
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a percentage
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 of about 23%. Regarding
the
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healthcare,
Australia
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were
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apply
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recorded the
most
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highest
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 expenses in
this
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 domain by 23% and 21%
respictively
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respectively
.
meanwhile
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,
The
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the
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UK
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 recorded the lowest by 7%. In terms of
,
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apply
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 Food's amount of
spendings
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spending
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 were
alomst
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almost
 similar in
the
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the
UK
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,
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 18%, 14% and 17%
respictiviely
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respectively
. About the
transportations
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transportation
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,
Japan
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 went up by 26% on the
othe
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other
 hand, the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 were 21% and 18% respectively.
Finally
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,
between
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among
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 the four main
areas
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areas,
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 it's
clearly
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clear
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 that
the
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apply
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housing is the most
expenses
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expensive
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 in the three countries.
While
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 the
heslthcare
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healthcare
, food and
transportations
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transportation
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 were
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, australia, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditure
  • main areas of spending
  • comparative analysis
  • spending habits
  • economic factors
  • cultural influences
  • social contributions
  • prioritize
  • expenditure differences
  • spending patterns
  • chart analysis
  • aggregate spending
  • allocation of resources
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