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29DEC---The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

29DEC---The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts depict the proportion of learning a foreign
language
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 by both genders among students aged 14 to 16 and a comparison of the top three
languages
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 they studied in 1984 and 2007.
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, the percentage of girls who studied a foreign
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 consistently led in both years in line with
French
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the French
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languange
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language
, which became the most
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. Starting at nearly half of all female students who learn another
language
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, the proportion of those declined from 1984 to 2007, reaching 40%. During the same period, boys experienced a slight decrease with a lower percentage than girls, starting from 30% to 25%. As for the bar chart about the top three
languages
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, in 1984, the number of those who learned French surpassed other
languages
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 at 50%. Followed by the German
language
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 at 20% and Spanish
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 around 5%, showing the smallest figure
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this
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 year.
Although
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 French led the rate, in 2007, it dropped to 30%.
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, the remaining two
languages
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 rose slightly to 10% for Spanish and 22% for German.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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