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You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the station manager. In your letter: • give details of where and when you left the bag • describe the bag and its contents • suggest how you could get the bag back

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to you
for
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complaning
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complain
 about my bag which
i
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 lost
on
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train
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the train
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 station
,
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while
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 travelling to Lahore on 18 Oct 2024. When
train
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the train
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start
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started
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departuring from
station
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the station
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,
i
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come
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 to know that,
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 left my bag on
bench
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the bench
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of
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 the waiting area.My carrier contains some of my clothes,
asseseries
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accessories
 and laptop,
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, it
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have
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my Nationality card,driving
lisence
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licence
license
 and headphones.Please request
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lost and found department,to check my carrier ,
has
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it
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 contains meaningful items.If they check my nationality card,the address of my home is mentioned,they can post there ,
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,they informed me to pick
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 bag for
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 queries. Your Faithfully, Saqib Khan
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coherence & cohesion
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors and ensure proper punctuation to improve clarity.
coherence & cohesion
Consider organizing the paragraph more effectively to improve logical flow.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about how you suggest getting the bag back to enhance task achievement.
task achievement
The letter includes all the necessary components, such as the date and description of the bag.
greeting and closing
Greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, contributing to a formal tone.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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