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You have just returned from a holiday. You are unhappy with the quality of the hotel you stayed in and want to complain to the travel agency that arranged the holiday. Write a letter to the manager of the travel agency. In your letter, say about the holiday and where you stayed  mention why you are unhappy about the hotel where you stayed say what you would like the travel agency to do  Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I trust you are well. The purpose of
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 letter is to express my dissatisfaction
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 the accommodation that we booked for our vacation through your travel agency. First and foremost, we went for family holidays in New York City for a week and stayed in the Four Seasons Hotel located
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downtown.
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 that, our trip was in the first week of April.
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, despite
of
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requesting the
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foam mattress
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 for all our rooms, all the beds had spring
mattress
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.
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, there was an unpleasant noise coming out of the AC.
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 but not
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least, the quality of the food served was
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 poor.
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, I would like you to provide
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 feedback to the hotel
that
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 we stayed and request them to fix all these issues. In
addtion
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, I would
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 like to get a partial refund
due to
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 all the
hurdels
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hurdles
 that we faced. I hope you understand my concerns and take
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 steps to prevent
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 kind of
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. Thank you. Sincerely, Ruchin Patel

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coherence cohesion
Your letter has a logical flow but could benefit from clearer separation between different ideas, particularly when mentioning the issues encountered at the hotel.
task achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'despite of' which should be 'despite'.
coherence cohesion
You successfully opened and closed your letter in a polite and suitable manner, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is proper for formal communication, and the content addresses the purpose of the task effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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