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The table chart below illustrates the percentage of school children attend of four groups in secondary school from 2000 to 2009.

The table chart below illustrates the percentage of school children attend of four groups in secondary school from 2000 to 2009.
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The data shows the proportions of children's attendance in Specialist,Grammar, Voluntary and
community
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schools
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 in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009.
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, the total of pupils who attend
Community
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schools
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 increased
while
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 the
number
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 of kids who registered in the other groups decreased. High numbers of
students
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 attend
Community
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 and Voluntary institutions. Voluntary Controlled
Schools
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 had the highest figure of
students
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 at just over half in 2000, but their rates gradually declined to 20% in 2009 to become the second-highest school in the
number
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 of children registered.
Community
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schools
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 had the lowest total of
students
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 at 12% before its significant increase to 58% in 2009 as the highest school in
students
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'
number
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. Specialist
schools
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 had 12%
students
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 in 2000 which is similar to
Community
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 Secondary school children's
number
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 and remained as the lowest with just 10% of
students
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 in 2009. Grammar
Schools
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 had only 24 per cent of the total
number
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 of pupils in 2000 as the second highest institute and went down to 12% in 2009 which turned out to be the second lowest in the
students
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' registration
number
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