The pie charts below show the distribution of energy production by source in Country A for the years 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Energy Sources in 2000 •Coal: 40% •Oil: 30% •Natural Gas: 15% •Nuclear: 10% •Renewable Energy: 5% Energy Sources in 2020 •Coal: 25% •Oil: 20% •Natural Gas: 25% •Nuclear: 15% •Renewable Energy: 15%

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The pie charts illustrate the allocation of produced

energy

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from five different sources in country A in 2000 and 2020.

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, the

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produced from both coal and oil declined between 2000 and 2020.

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there was an increase in the use of natural gas ,nuclear and renewable

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between

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the same years. In the year 2000,

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the majority

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of the

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made was 40% from coal.

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was followed by 30% that was obtained from oil. Both natural gas and nuclear sources comprised

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15% and 10% of the

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produced within the same year.

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, renewable

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produced the

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percentage at 5% in 2000

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produced by coal declined drastically to 25% in 2020.

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,the percentage

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of oil

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reduced by 10% over the two decades .Renewable

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, nuclear, and natural gas saw increases in the percentages of

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produced,

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, both nuclear and renewable

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had a similar percentage at 15% in 2020.

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