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The table below shows the percentage of households with electronic goods in New Zealand in 1998 and 2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of households with electronic goods in New Zealand in 1998 and 2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the table given illustrates the percentage of chores with electronic goods in New Zealand in 2002 and 2020. As a general overview, washing
machine
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 and
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TV
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 were highest proportion among
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other gadgetries
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 digital
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was
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 least in both years.
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, all given goods increased in numbers except the video recorder.
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that Cell phone usage improved four times
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 almost two decades 20% to 80%.Digital camera was shown significant change which was 2% and flew to 40%. Computer and Dishwasher were
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almost
 same number with 50 and 45 percentages respectively followed to 78 and 55 percentages respectively.
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, the only item which has decreased
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video
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 recorder by 5% 75% to 60%. Washing
machine
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 and Color TV showed
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rose
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 by 1 and 4 percentages respectively
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 they were almost
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for
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 New Zealand citizens.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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