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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycle from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycle from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevant
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The data in
line
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the line
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 graph demonstrates the percentage of paper and cardboard, glass containers, aluminium cans and
plastic
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 that we used
in
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apply
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between 1982
till
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and
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 2010 in a particular country. From an
overall
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 perspective,
aluminium
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the aluminium
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 cans and
class
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glass
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container
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recycle
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recycling
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rate
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 is increasing with the
year
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on the other hand
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plastic
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container
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 and cardboard reuse is
decline in
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declining
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 as
plastic
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 is
at
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a
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constant
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a constant
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 growth
rate
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.
To begin
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 with, starting in the
year
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 1982 class
container
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as well as
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 paper and carboat
recycle
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recycling
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rate
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with decreasing
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decreased
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 till 1986. After
that
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that,
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 both reuse
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rate
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rates
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 increased up to 1995.
However
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, people and
carboat
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cardboard
car boat
carbonate
 recycle
rediant
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radiant
 throughout the
year
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 till 2010.
While
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 class
container
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recycle
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recycling
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rate
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increase
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increased
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 continuously
after
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from
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 1995 till 2010 but was never higher in return paper and cardboard.
Additionally
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,
aluminium
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the aluminium
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recycle
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recycling
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rate
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 was around 1.5% but it continuously
increase
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increased
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 and raised to almost 43% in the
year
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 2010.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
plastic
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recycle
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recycling
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 started in the
year
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 1986
with
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at
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 around 1% and throughout the
year
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increase
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increased
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 but
a
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apply
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merely
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mere
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 chains in
percent
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per cent
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 from one person to around 9% in 2010.
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