The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart depicts the rate of Australian males and females doing regular physical activity in various
age
groups in the year 2010.
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Overall
, women whose Linking Words
age
is more than 25 exercised more than men. Use synonyms
However
, in the Linking Words
age
group 15-24 males did more physical activity than women. Both sexes experienced fluctuations.
Males who are 15-24 years old did regular exercise about 53% Use synonyms
while
their female peers were below them almost 47%. In the following Linking Words
age
group 25 to 34, the trend suddenly fell to approximately 42%. Use synonyms
Then
, it continues to decline steadily to almost 39% in the Linking Words
age
35-44. Use synonyms
However
, it increased marginally to about 44% in 45-54 and continued to grow to almost 45% in 55-64. The Linking Words
last
group which is 65 and over grew to nearly 47%.
25 between 34 years old women were doing more exercise than younger ones about 49%. Linking Words
Then
, the trend sharply increased to about 52% in the Linking Words
age
of 35-44 and it slightly inclined to almost 53% in 45-54 and it was nearly the same as the trend in the Use synonyms
age
55-64. 65 years and over females' activity rate was hitting a low point Use synonyms
about
46%.Change preposition
of about
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