The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information about the
number
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of uneducated men and women in different regions for the
last
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year. First and foremost we notice that the
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of
illitrated
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illiterate
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women has almost doubled the
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of males we can see that South
Asia
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has the highest
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of illiteracy coming second and third are the Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa.When it comes to East
Asia
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unlike its neighbour South we can see that it has a significantly lower of uneducated people.
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when it comes to the developed countries we can definitely say
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almost zero for both genders.
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we can see that the
number
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of the illiterated is significantly higher in different parts of the world
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as South
Asia
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, Arab States and
lastly
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Sub-Saharan Africa where the
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of uneducated women super
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the
number
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of uneducated men in different parts of the globe even in the parts where the
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of the educated people is high like East
Asia
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, Latin America and in many Developed Countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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