The line graph shows the number of serous crimes that occurred in London in between 2003 and 2012. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavent.

The line graph shows the number of serous crimes that occurred in London in between 2003 and 2012. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavent.
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The given line graph illustrates the number of serious crimes, which occurred in London from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, armed
robbery
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experienced a
siginificant
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significant
decline over the period.
Moreover
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,
while
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assault
experiened
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experienced
a slight increase,
murder
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the murder
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remained stable. In 2003, below 3500 armed robberies occurred, and it experienced a slight increase in 2004, and approximately 3800 armed
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robbery
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robberies
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occurred in that year.
However
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, after 2004, armed
robbery
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experienced a dramatic decrease, and in 2008, roughly 1100 robberies occurred.
Moreover
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, after a slight rise in 2008, armed
robbery
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remained almost stable at around 1500 from the year 2009 to 2012. Meanwhile, approximately 2500 assaults occurred in 2003. With a slight decline from 2006 to 2008, the number of
assault
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assaults
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reached roughly 2800 in 2012.
On the other hand
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, around 500 murders occurred in 2003, and with some slight
increase
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increase,
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it
remaind
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remained
remains
almost stable throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words robbery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 5 times.
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