The line graph shows the number of serous crimes that occurred in London in between 2003 and 2012. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavent.
The given line graph illustrates the number of serious crimes, which occurred in London from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, armed Linking Words
robbery
experienced a Use synonyms
siginificant
decline over the period. Correct your spelling
significant
Moreover
, Linking Words
while
assault Linking Words
experiened
a slight increase, Correct your spelling
experienced
murder
remained stable.
In 2003, below 3500 armed robberies occurred, and it experienced a slight increase in 2004, and approximately 3800 armed Add an article
the murder
Use synonyms
robbery
occurred in that year. Change to a plural noun
robberies
However
, after 2004, armed Linking Words
robbery
experienced a dramatic decrease, and in 2008, roughly 1100 robberies occurred. Use synonyms
Moreover
, after a slight rise in 2008, armed Linking Words
robbery
remained almost stable at around 1500 from the year 2009 to 2012.
Meanwhile, approximately 2500 assaults occurred in 2003. With a slight decline from 2006 to 2008, the number of Use synonyms
assault
reached roughly 2800 in 2012. Fix the agreement mistake
assaults
On the other hand
, around 500 murders occurred in 2003, and with some slight Linking Words
increase
it Add a comma
increase,
remaind
almost stable throughout the period.Correct your spelling
remained
remains
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