The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts provide data on how youngsters would watch
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in Canada in two distinct time periods. It is vividly shown that traditional
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used to be more popular among the youth as a means of watching
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, at the beginning of the term,
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the use of the flat screen
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surpassed the latter one a decade later. In 2009, humans in the 18-25 age group were into
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form
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of
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television (34%), the percentage of which was almost
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more than that of desktop computer users. A laptop ranked
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second , being preferred by junior citizens of Canada(20), the number of which was fourfold higher than that of tablet consumers. (8%) 2019 was the year of
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enthusiasts ranking at 27 per cent, just 1
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ahead of mobile phone lovers.
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and computers shared the same level of prevalence among 18-25 year-olds in 2019. The oldest form of
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viewing had almost no fame by users at that time.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • device
  • traditional TV
  • laptop
  • mobile phone
  • tablet
  • streaming services
  • usage
  • trend
  • shift
  • technological advancements
  • viewing habits
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