The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one town in 1986, 1996 and 2006.

The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one town in 1986, 1996 and 2006.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one town in 1986, 1996 and 2006.
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the provided table illustrates the figures of men and women involved in four distinctive industrial fields in one town,
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within 3 specific years, namely, 1986, 1996 and 2006
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, except for
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industry which
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regarded as heavy work, Female seems to hold a predominant position within the other sectors. During the given period retail and shops remained stable in male employment at 13%,
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the health industry stood at the same in the first two decades and showed an increase in 2010 from 7% to 9%.
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, tourism diminished in 1990 by close to 13% and remained unaltered in the
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two decades, roughly 10%. Slightly 30% of male workers shrank by half in 2000 and in 2010 the percentage dropped by two-thirds of what it was at the beginning. The percentage of women working in the retail and shops sector rose slightly from 7% in 1990 to 9% in 2010. These minor changes
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indicated in tourism by growing at 2% in each ten-year span. In health fields, female employers again revealed expansion slightly over 9%, 11% and 15 % in each decadal period. Specifically, at the beginning women employers demonstrated an expansion in 2000 from 7% to 8%,meanwhile, in 2010 steadily lowered
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3%.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • gender-based preferences
  • industry employment
  • male-dominated industry
  • female participation
  • employment opportunities
  • traditional association
  • gender disparity
  • equal male and female employment
  • evolutionary trends
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