The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar graph illustrates the
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in twelve European countries (Belgium, Denmark, Estonia, France, Lithuania, Luxembourg, Netherlands, Norway, Poland, Slovenia, Spain and
Switzerland
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)
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health spending rates in 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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,
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some countries experienced slight changes with increasing or decreasing over
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, some of them remained
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.
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,
Switzerland
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recorded the highest costs of healthcare,
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to Estonia which had the lowest and 8% lower than
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across all three years. Belgium, Estonia, Spain and
Switzerland
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had the same pathway with remaining constant by 10, 3, 8,
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percents
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percent
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respectively in the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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, Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland and Slovenia were stable between 2002 and 2007.
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, they saw a slight increase in 2012 by adding one
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to their expenses, finishing at 10%, 6%, 10%, 7%,
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% by the end of the period.
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, France, Luxembourg and
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the Netherlands
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experienced a slight decrease over time.
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, France's trend fluctuated, it started
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10 percent, inclined to 11% and dropped to 9%.
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, Luxembourg was 8% in the
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2002 and 2007,
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it fell to 7%.
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, Netherlands started with 10% and continued with 9%,
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it declined slightly to 8%
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of the period.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words switzerland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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