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First impression is important, some people believe that doing well in interviews is the key to secure a good job. To what extent do you agree?

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First impressions are crucial because they set the tone for how people perceive you. It
play
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 an imperative role in success
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement. To start with, it is well said that "first impression is the
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 impression" so whatever you do in your starting they will always remember. When
interviewer
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interviewers
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 ask something they always check
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the candidates
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candidates
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 qualifications, capability,
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and theoratical
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theoratical
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theoretical
 and practical knowledge so one should always
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 for
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 type
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 interview.
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, when someone
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 for their interview they not only check their knowledge about something but
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 their personality and confidence. So if
person
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perform
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bad
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 in these two parts , they will surely rejected. Statistics reveal that 76% of people fail to clear interviews because of
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 of confidence. In conclusion, for securing a good and reputable job , your first impression should be the best.
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