many city centres these day have traffic flow problems, causing congestion and pollution. One solution is to build fast ring roads on the outskirts of acity, taking traffic away from the centre. While this is helpful in some ways, it also causes new problems/ to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Clear air and healthy conditions are mainly important things for the capital town, which is facing a flood of transportation. Despite
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the issue, creating new access across the countryside is a positive way to move the crowded transportation outside the town, but it consists of novelty problems for people. I strongly agree with that statement, build another access to go the hall cities
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the condition from one place to another.
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coherence cohesion
Work on developing a more structured introduction and conclusion. This will help frame your arguments better.
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Include more detailed examples and a deeper analysis of both the benefits and potential drawbacks of building ring roads.
coherence cohesion
Clarify your main arguments and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea.
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The topic is clearly introduced.
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There is an attempt to discuss both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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