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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data about the
proportion
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 of the population in different countries in Asia
such
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 as
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 ,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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,
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Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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 settle down in urban over the 52 years interval starting in 1970 and projection between 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of individuals living in urban in different countries has increased trend during 70 years. the prominent point is
Malaysia
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 which
is
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has
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 the highest
percentages
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percentage
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 of urbanization meanwhile the opposite is true for
Thailand
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become
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which has
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 the lowest
percent
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percentage
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. In 1970, the percentage of residents who stayed in
Malaysia
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 was 30% before increasing steadily afterwards and reached around 45% after the 20-years ,which
only
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is only
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 under
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of
total
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the total
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 population via
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 . After
that
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that,
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this
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 trend in
Malaysia
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 has witnessed a
sky rocket
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skyrocket
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 from 45% to around 85%
individuals
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of individuals
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 settling down in
city
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the city
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and
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apply
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also
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 in
this
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 year 2040 the projection in
this
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 country will hit
an all
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a
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 time
about
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of
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 quantity citizens. Regardless of
highest
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the highest
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 residents
initially
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 around 32% and experienced
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a slightly
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slightly rose
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slight rise
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by
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of
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 1% in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, it still accounted largest
scales
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scale
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was
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approximately 50% from 1970 to 1990.
However
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, the
proportion
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 of
individual
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individuals
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accommodating
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accommodation
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 decreased gradually from 50% to 42% had
same
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the same
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 numbers in
Indonesia
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 before is predicted 55% in 2040. Prior, in
Thailand
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 the
percentages
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percentage
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 of people
had
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who had
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 their own
house
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houses
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 in urban was under 20%
compares
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compared
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 to around 12%
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of resident
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resident
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residents
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 from
Indonesia
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 in 1970. After which
this
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 trend
had grown
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grew
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 steadily
during
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apply
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over 70 years
as
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apply
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up to approximately 48% and
being
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is
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 the lowest figure
all
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of all
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 time.
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, the details
was
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recorded in
Indonesia
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 about quantity people in 1970 was 15% ,
this
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 figure had no longer the lowest urbanization. Between 2000 and 2010 , the percentages of population accommodating in
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the city
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city
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cities
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 had risen from around 30% and 45% which is
same
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the same
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 data in
Thailand
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 respectively, reaching 60% behind only about 20% of
Malaysia
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in
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apply
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this
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 year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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