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The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of male and female
students
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 in thousands who attended
further
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education
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 in the UK. Information is divided into full-time or part-time in the bar chart and by three periods (1970/71.1980/81,1990/91).
Overall
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, the majority of
students
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 were in part-time
education
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, regardless the gender. The number of men and women who attended full-time
education
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 increased over the periods
while
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 female
students
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 who were in part-time
education
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 rose over the past three decades. In terms of full-time
education
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, there were around 1000 men pursuing
further
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education
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 in 1970/71, before falling to about 850 in 190/81,
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 rose to 900 in 1990/91. Meanwhile, the number of female part-time
students
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 started at just below 800 in 1970/71,
then
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 rose steadily to reach the highest peak at about 1100 in 1990/91. As for full-time
education
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, male
students
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 started at just around 100 in 1970/71.
This
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 figure
then
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 increased steadily to reach a peak of just over 200 in 1990/91. A similar growth in the figure for women was evident reaching 2000 in 1980/81 and just over 200 in 1990/91 in the final year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Enrollment trends
  • Gender differences
  • Societal factors
  • Economic factors
  • Period of time
  • Educational choices
  • Job market dynamics
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