The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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The bar graphs present the life of the UK
graduates
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and postgraduates after leaving
the
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college and did not land a full-time job in 2008.
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, it can be seen that most of the UK people who earned
bachelors
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bachelor's
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degree
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and
masteral
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master
opted to
further
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their studies. Meanwhile, a small proportion of the
graduates
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prefer to do voluntary
works
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. In detail, 29, 665 UK
graduates
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continued to study for a
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masters
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degree
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,
while
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17, 735 did a part-time job in 2008.
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, there were 16, 235
graduates
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were unemployed and 3,500 decided to work voluntarily. In terms of the life of
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a masters
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masters
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degree
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holder, 2, 725 decided to
further
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their studies by enrolling in a doctorate class.
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, there were 2, 535 postgraduates settled on part-time jobs
while
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, 1, 625
of
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masters
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holder were jobless.
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, 345 of
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masters
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degree
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holder
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settle for voluntary work.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, degree, masters with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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