The chart below Shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cornparisons where relevant

The chart below Shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cornparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates
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a consequence of a survey about individual’s drinking and purchase habits,
such
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as
coffee
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and tea in different Australian cities. Units are measured with percentages.
Overall
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, the participants who went to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea in the
last
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4 weeks are showing high demand in 4 cities.
In contrast
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, the number of people who bought fresh
coffee
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in the
last
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weeks is involving lowest percentage in all cities.
Initially
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, the number of people who bought fresh
coffee
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in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart was 44%, 43%, 34%, %34 and 47% respectively.
In addition
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, the residents, who bought instant
coffee
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in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adeliade
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Adelaide
and
hobart
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was
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just above 45%, nearly 50%, 53%, 50% and just below 55% respectively.
Finally
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, the participants, who went to a cafe for
whether
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coffee
coffe
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coffee
or tea  in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adeliade
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Adelaide
and
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Hobart
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hobart
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Hobart
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was higher than 60%, 64%, 56%, 49% and 63% respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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