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Band 4

Most companies and organizations requires their employees to wear uniforms to work. what are the jobs that need uniform? what are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms to work?

#companies #organizations #employees #uniforms #work #jobs #uniform
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Some work
required
Wrong verb form
requires
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Use synonyms
uniform
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uniforms
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 for higher
disciplin
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discipline
,
such
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 as banking industry.
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Uniform
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Uniforms
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 present a professional image to
customer
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customers
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 which
make
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makes
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 them feel safe and
trust
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trusted
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.
However
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, there are some shortages of wearing uniforms to work.
Firstly
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, the cost of the
uniform
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 is necessary.
Company
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The company
A company
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 need to prepare uniforms for each
employees
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employee
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 which cause
an
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apply
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extra expenses.
Also
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, the image of
company
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the company
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 could be damaged if one of the
employess
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employees
 misuse the
uniform
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.
For example
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, wearing
bank
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a bank
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uniform
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 to scam people
to give
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into giving
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 them bank
password
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passwords
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 and steal money from
the
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apply
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clients.
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion to give a more structured feel to your essay, guiding the reader through your ideas.
task achievement
Ensure each point is thoroughly explained with its relevance to the topic made explicit. For instance, why is professionalism important in banking specifically?
task achievement
The point about uniforms conveying a professional image to customers is well-articulated and relevant.
task achievement
You included a specific and relevant example about the misuse of uniforms, which enhances your argument and illustrates the potential disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mandatory attire
  • Professional ensemble
  • Dress code
  • Corporate identity
  • Branding
  • Safety gear
  • Team cohesiveness
  • Institutional image
  • Employee morale
  • Personal expression
  • Uniformity
  • Hierarchy
  • Workwear
  • Standardized attire
  • Individuality
  • Cost implications
  • Sustainability issues
  • Comfort fit
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