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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the primary reasons behind
decline
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the decline
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productivity
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in productivity
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 in agricultural
area
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areas
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.
While
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 the table presents three main reasons (deforestation,
overcultivation
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over-cultivation
over cultivation
 and
overgrazingand
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overgrazing
overgrazing and
) and
there
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their
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 affection
on
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in
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 three
diffrent
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different
 areas during
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
Overall
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, over-grazing and deforestation are the main
contributor
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contributors
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of
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to
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 degradation worldwide.
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however
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However
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,Europe carried the highest amount of total land degraded,
South
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and South
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 America was the least affected. The largest causes of
reduce
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reduced
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protuctivity
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productivity
 were over-grazing with
35percent
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35 per cent
while
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 deforestation and over-cultivation
also
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 have
asignificant
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a significant
 effect with 30%,28% ,
respectivly
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respectively
.The smallest amount goes with other reasons with 7
percent
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per cent
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. The figure witness
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the dominant
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dominant
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dominance
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 of Europe
on
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in
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 the amount of land
drgarded
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regarded
degraded
 with 23
percent
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per cent
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 in total .Oceania was the second region with
13percent
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13 per cent
 .
however
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, North America was the most area
preserve
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preserved
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the
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apply
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agricultural area with 5
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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