You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for a volunteer position at a hospital. Write a letter to the hospital expressing your interest in applying for the volunteer role. In your letter: Explain why you are interested in this unpaid work. Share any relevant experience you have that makes you a suitable candidate for this position. Mention when you would be available to start volunteering.
Dear Mom or Sir,
I see there is
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advertisement
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the newspaper
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I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph conveys a single, clear idea. You have mixed multiple points in the same paragraph which makes it slightly harder for the reader to follow.
task achievement
Include more specific details about your availability and perhaps provide a more structured timeline of when you can start.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is very suitable for a formal letter expressing interest in a volunteer position.
coherence cohesion
Your closing conveys politeness and respect, which is effective for this kind of correspondence.