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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people taking holidays at home, abroad or both or no holidays for the year 2014 and 2015

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people taking holidays at home, abroad or both or no holidays for the year 2014 and 2015
The table above depicts data on the percentage of
british
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British
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 people
donate
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donating
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 money to charity by five different
age
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range
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ranges
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 for the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is evident that
the
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apply
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British citizens aged between 18-25, 26-35 and 36-50
give
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gave
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 more money to charity in 1990 as compared to 2010,
while
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 other
age
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 groups between 51 to 65
donate
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donated
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 more cash in the
year
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 2010. Regarding
lowest
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the lowest
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age
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 group 18-25, individuals
donate
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donated
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 around 17% , in the
year
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 1990, which was 10% more than
2010
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in 2010
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.
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, these people have the
least
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lowest
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per-cent
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percentage
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 among all
age
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 groups. The next
age
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 groups 26-35 and 36-50, had
the
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a
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 significant improvement in the
percent
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percentage
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 for both
age
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 people by
acquireing
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acquiring
 the peak donation by
the
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apply
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British citizens for
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year
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the year
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 1990.
However
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, for the
year
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 2010, the
most
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highest
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 percentage was observed by
51
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the 51
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-65 group with 40%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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