The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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diagram shows the rate of Australian men and ladies in numerous age bunches who did daily physical movement in 2010. There are six eras.
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Firstly
, 58.8 Linking Words
percent
of boys aged 15 to 24 had a sporting life, Change the spelling
per cent
while
47.7% of girls of the same age preferred to do physical activity regularly. Linking Words
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of humans matured Change the spelling
per cent
25
to 34, to be exact 42.2% of males and 48.9% of women do it. So looking at the first generation, it may be clear that Add a missing verb
is 25
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females have increased their levels of active lifestyle. Fix the agreement mistake
year
Moreover
, the following age of ladies increases their spending time in Linking Words
sport
mode. It’s 52.5% and Fix the agreement mistake
sports
hence
, the other gender is 39.5%, Linking Words
this
is the worst era of sports.
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Furthermore
, people who are from 45 to 54 years old are Linking Words
enhancing
. That’s to say, gentlemen started to boost their scale, it’s 43.1%. Wrong verb form
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also
keeping up and improving. The next ladder demonstrates that both genders from 55 to 64 try to keep balance. Linking Words
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as gentlewomen’s Linking Words
percent
is 53, Replace the word
percentage
it
means that they decreased a little bit. Correct pronoun usage
which
On the other hand
, guys get 45.1%. Linking Words
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addition
the Add a comma
addition,
last
era is individuals who are 65 and over. Here, the probability that their percentages will become the same is very high. Since it is 46.7 for misters and 47.1 for missesLinking Words
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