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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data about the proportion of temporary migrant
people
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 who work in four continents in 2003 and 2006,
as well as
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 the percentage of these workers per 1,000
people
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 in 2006.
Overall
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,
United
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the United
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 States is the leading
country
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 who have the highest migrant workforce in both periods. In the meantime, New Zealand
has
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had
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 the biggest
workers'
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workers
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 population per 1,000 in 2006. Regarding the
country
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 from the southern side, Australia ranked as the top second nation in 2003 with
outsource
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outsourced
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worker
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workers
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 at 154,000 and continuously
increase
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increased
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at
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to
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 219,000 in 2006.
In contrast
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, New Zealand is the lowest
country
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 that has migrant
worker
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workers
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 in both years
although
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 they
experiencing
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experienced
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 a slight two-third
increased
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increase
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. On the other side,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom showed a doubled rise from 147,000 to 266,000 in that two years
observation
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of observation
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. In the
mean time
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meantime
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,
United
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the United
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 States as the most populated
country
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 with the highest migrant
worker
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workers
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 has
become
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apply
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the lowest percentage of
people
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 only at 2.3 per 1,0000
people
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 in 2006.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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