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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Umar

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Umar
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The two pie
chart
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charts
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 illustrate information about the comparison of some
type
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types
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 of
energy
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 production
of
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in
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France
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during
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over
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 two years.
Overall
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,
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energy
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the energy
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 production percentage decreased only in Petro ,
others
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while others
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 went up . The
most
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biggest rise had the other .After 10 years
the
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Coal
still
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is still
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 the
most
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biggest
energy
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 producer
of
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in
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France
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 In 1995 the highest level of
percent
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per cent
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produce
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produced
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 was Coal exactly 29.80 % almost the same result
had
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a
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as
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 gas 26.63 % and Petro 29.27 % these 3 types of
energy
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was
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were
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 the
most
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biggest in
France
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 in 1995 . Produce of
France
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 in 2005 was noticeably changed ,in
totally
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 Coal and Gas increased
little
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 bit .
However
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 , the percentage of Petro dramatically declined to 19.55% . Nuclear and other significantly changed , they became
to
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10.10%
of
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Nuclear and 9.10
of
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other .
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Nevertheless
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 the figure of their lines still
stay
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same
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the same
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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