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The line graph compares the amount of money spent on research into renewable energy per person in Switzerland, Denmark, Spain, and the UK over a span of 25 years. Write an essay analyzing the trends shown in the graph. In your essay, describe the general tendencies for each country, the comparisons between countries over the given period, and discuss the possible reasons for the patterns observed as well as the implications .these trends might have for the future development of renewable energy

The line graph compares the amount of money spent on research into renewable energy per person in Switzerland, Denmark, Spain, and the UK over a span of 25 years. Write an essay analyzing the trends shown in the graph. In your essay, describe the general tendencies for each country, the comparisons between countries over the given period, and discuss the possible reasons for the patterns observed as well as the implications .these trends might have for the future development of renewable energy
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The line graph illustrates the number of countries spending money in 4 nations from 1975 to 2000.
Overall
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, as can be seen, Suvilzerland nad a significant cost.
However
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, the UK had a fewer expenditure.
Denmark
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 and Spain received a middle total of money.
It is clear that
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 Switzerland took the highest point than other countries. From 1975 to 1980, there is
increase
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an increase
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 sharply in their spending mong from 0 to more than 28$.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 In the modded period number of money Climbed from under 3 to nearly 4$. .
However
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, in the
last
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 2 years, the peak of Coust arrived at under 5 points.
Secondly
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, in the UK had increased sharply to 1.
Moreover
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, from 1980 to 1990 actual numbers of spending . From 1990 to 200 the number of costs decreased steadily to nearly 1 Point.
On the other hand
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,
Denmark
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 and Spain had increased Sharply in fat first 2 years.
Moreover
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,
in
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apply
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Denmark
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 remained at the Same Level tell 1990 around more than 1$.
While
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, in Spain had fell to under 1$ from 1980 to 1990. And
last
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 2 years were had
flactual
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factual
 to nearly 0 points.
Finally
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, from 1990 to 2000
Denmark
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 increased to under 4$.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, moreover".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words denmark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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