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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. INABAT

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. INABAT
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The bar chart shows the number of international
graduates
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 from UK universities in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, all of these universities
was
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were
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 increased. The highest percentages of
graduates
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 were
Oxford
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in Oxford
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,Cambridge
also
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 London. Cardiff and Bath, Bristol
also
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 increased in two thousand fifteen.
However
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, the less of figures
had
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were in
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 Bristol. Bristol rising from almost 7 over 8. In 2000, Cambridge was fifteen percent
however
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, Oxford was almost 14. But in 2015 Oxford increased the highest percentage of
the
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apply
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graduates
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 and they peaked at
twenty five
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twenty-five
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percent
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per cent
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. London
shows
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showed
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 a lot of
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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graduates
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 in 2015. In 2000, London had the smallest percentage but in 2015 was increased
about
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by about
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 twenty percent.
Furthermore
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, Cardiff and Bath were almost 14 and 13 in two thousand fifteen.
In
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This
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this
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 bar chart compares international
graduates
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 from
the
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apply
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UK universities between 2000 and 2015.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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