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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ALFATIMA

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ALFATIMA
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Bar
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The bar
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 chart illustrates the
number
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 and information about international
graduates
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 from universities in
UK
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the UK
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in
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from
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 2000-2015
Overall
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 there are 6 universities with international
graduates
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.
The
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apply
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Oxford in 2015
has
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had
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 the largest
number
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 of graduated students and in 2000
the
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apply
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Bristol
has
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had
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 the smallest. In detail in
the
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apply
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London
was
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were
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 5 people with international
graduates
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and
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which
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 increased to 20 in 2015,
while
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 that of Cardiff
university
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University
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 dropped significantly by 5 people in the same year.
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However
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However,
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 there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 upward in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
graduates
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of
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from
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 both Bristol
university
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University
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 and Bath in 2000.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 there was
significant
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a significant
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 decrease in
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number
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the number
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 of Oxford and Cambridge universities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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