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Band 4.5

You are planning a trip for you and a group of friends to a resort in a foreign country. Write a letter to the manager of the resort requesting more information. Your letter should include When you hope to be staying at the resort Ask for suggestions on activities to do Ask for advice on places to eat in both vegetarian and family-friendly places

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I
an
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 planning a trip with my group of friends
in
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to
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 your resort. I would be pleased
,
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 If you give me some information about your place. I would like to visit the resort at 11.08.2025-18.08.2025. I hope you have free rooms for six people.
However
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,
firstly
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, I have to know
that
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more information. We are used to sea sports. I hope you have facilities. And
also
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, we are enjoying
with
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paragliding. Would you tell me your
opportunitis
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opportunities
opportunity
 and please give us
recommendation
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.
Secondly
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, it would be our first visit
in
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 your country. We are totally foreign
your
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to your
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cultural
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culture
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. Would you give us some advice,
what
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 should we eat (
this
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 place
have
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 to fit for
vegetarian
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vegetarians
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)?
Also
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,
my
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some my
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 some of
friends
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my friends
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has
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 a child so,
this
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 place
need
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needs
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 to be
familys-friendly
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family-friendly
. Thank you for your kindness. Have a good day Thanks Diana Hampton

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structure
Try to organize your ideas more clearly by dividing them into separate paragraphs for each main point, such as the activities and the dietary requirements.
coherence
Make sure every sentence naturally follows the previous one to improve the flow, avoiding abrupt transitions.
grammar
Make sure to check for minor grammatical errors and typos for a more polished letter.
content
The letter clearly requests information about room availability, activities, and dietary needs, which fulfills the task requirements.
tone
The tone is polite and respectful, well-suited to a formal letter addressed to a resort manager.
formality
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal for a letter of this kind.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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