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Band 3

Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument that,
due to
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differences
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 and
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females
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 in terms of their personality and capacity, some professions have better outcomes when they are done by
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 gender . In my opinion,
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believing
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 the reasons I will discuss
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 a pivotal
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for
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 the
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differences
 between genders is physical
capabalities
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capabilities
. Evident is the fact that most men are
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stronger than women.
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Therefore
,
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physically
physical
 demanding jobs are more suitable for men rather than women.
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, In my experience, I have never seen
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 in my country, because in most cases they have to have enough
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strength
for repairing
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 cars.
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, mindset is a key
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difrrences
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differences
 between both sexes.
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, passion can have
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affect
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 on results.
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, most Women feel more thrilled in jobs related to
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 industry.
In
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addition
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 men are more
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 in terms of cars and rectifying their
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vehicles
. In conclusion,
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differences
 among both sexes are considerably
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affecting
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 the outcomes .So, pursuing happiness in occupation and considering what individuals are capable of doing is a key
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 outcomes.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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