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The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)

The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)
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The represent table provides information about the percentage of ladies in the
workforce
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 and
women
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 in government jobs in five different countries .Namely,Australia, Egypt,Sri Lanka ,Japan and the United States .
Overall
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,the percentage of Australian
women
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 who participate in the
labour
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force
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 is approximately equal to the proportion of
females
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 who
work
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 in the administration sector. With regard to the countries that have big differences between
women
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 who are employed in the
workforce
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 and
females
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 who
work
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 as managers . Sri Lanka is the highest country when it comes to the difference between
women
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 working in the
labour
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force
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 to manger and
women
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 with about a 32% difference .Japanese
females
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 favour working in the
labour
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force
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 more than employees as managers as is shown in the data because roughly half of the Japanese
women
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 are in the
workforce
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 48% opposed to
females
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 who are managers (17%). 20% of Egypt
women
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work
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 in
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labour
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the labour
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force
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 compared to the
females
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 who are selected to
work
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 in the administration field . Looking at the table in detail ,it is clearly seen that the greatest percentage of
women
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 who
work
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 in the
workforce
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 are from the United States (46%) and the difference between
females
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 working in the
labour
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force
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 and
women
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 who are employed in administration jobs is slightly small which is 3% .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words workforce, women, labour, force, females, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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