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You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

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Dear anny, I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you that
i
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I
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 am leaving my current
job
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. As you know,
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I
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 am doing
part-time
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a part-time
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job
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 in
hotel
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a hotel
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 as a cashier.
This
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job
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 has become stressful for me. I am earning less in
this
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job
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, which is not
fulfill
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 my needs and satisfaction. It is
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 not related
with
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to
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 my
fiels
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field
 of study. I have done my study in management and I
also
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 want
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job
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a job
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 related to my education.I want
full-time
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a full-time
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 permanent
job
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 as a human resource manager in any multinational company . The
job
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 should
be
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have
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higher
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a higher
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 salary
as well as
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 some incentives
benefits
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and benefits
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. I want to be
expertise
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an expertise
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 in
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the recuriting
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recuriting
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recruiting
 process because I am going to open my own business in future.
This
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job
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 will provide me
experience
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with experience
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of
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in
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 hiring and selecting
the
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apply
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candidates . I need your help in getting
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job
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. I know you have 5 years of experience
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as
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HR
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an HR
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 manager in
fedex
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a fedex
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 company and you know the process of
interview
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interviewing
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of
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for
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this
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job
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. I want some tricks from you to tackle the interview
as well as
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reference
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a reference
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by
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apply
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you
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apply
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. I hope you will help me
in
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with
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this
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 .
your
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yours
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 faithfully
anita
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coherence cohesion
Enhance logical structure by organizing ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Separate different points into distinct paragraphs for better clarity.
task achievement
Recheck the letter for grammatical errors and spelling consistency.
task achievement
The letter contains a clear opening and closing, maintaining a friendly tone throughout, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing have been correctly included, creating a friendly tone.
task achievement
The content fully addresses the prompt by explaining the reason for leaving the current job, describing the desired job, and asking for help.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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