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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the amount of contribution transported by four different methods of transport system in the United Kingdom between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of goods in
tonnes
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 transported by
road
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,
water
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, and
pipeline
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 experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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 the
tonnes
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 delivered by
rail
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 showed fluctuation throughout the period. To start from the outset, in 1974, the predominant mode of transportation was a
road
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, which was capable
to transport
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of transporting
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 approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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,
while
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 the
water
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 and
rail
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 section got nearly the same share of 40
tonnes
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.
However
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, the
pipeline
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 showed the lowest transported goods by 5
tonnes
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. In the following decade, both
rail
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 and
road
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 experienced
decline
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a decline
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,
whereas
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pipeline
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 and
water
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 modes illustrated growth until 1982.
Furthermore
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, by the years between 1982 and 1994, the
water
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 and
pipeline
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 transportation systems remained unchanged, sharing 60
million
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 and 18
million
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tonnes
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, respectively.
Nevertheless
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,
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road
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the road
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 mode showed steady growth,
while
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rail
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the rail
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 system showed fluctuation. By the start
2002
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of 2002
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,
road
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 mode numbered 100
million
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tonnes
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,
water
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 60
million
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tonnes
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,
rail
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 40
million
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tonnes
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, and
pipeline
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, which numbered 20
million
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tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, road, water, pipeline, rail, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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