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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy by fuel in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy by fuel in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data from the report made in 2008 about energy
consumption
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 in the USA by 6 different energy sources (Petrol and Oil, Coal, Natural
Gas
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, Nuclear, Solar/Wind, Hydropower) starting from 1980 with a forecast until 2030.
Overall
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, it is
forseen
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foreseen
 that
pertol
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petrol
 and oil will have remained at first position by 2030 and
its
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consumption
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 will dramatically increase over the period. It is predicted that Coal will
also
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 sharply increase in the future.
Although
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,
according to
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 the forecast, the
consumption
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 of natural
gas
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 will
initially
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 slightly rise, it
then
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 will plateau
untill
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until
 the end of the timeframe as it is
forseen
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foreseen
 for Nuclear, Solar and Hydropower energy. In detail, petrol and oil started from 35
units
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 and after
insignificant
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an insignificant
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 drop in 1985, receded to its initial position and rocketed from 1995 onwards it is estimated that
consumption
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 will rocket up to roughly 45
units
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. The growth of Coal started from just above 15 in 1980 and plateaued
untill
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until
 2006, and it is calculated that
this
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 type of fuel will almost double
in
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at
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 the end of the timeframe in comparison with the start of the period. The
consumption
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 of natural
gas
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 accounted for 20
units
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 in the first year and had an upward trend with minor oscillations;
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, it is projected that natural
gas
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 will plateau at 25
units
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. Nuclear, Solar, and Hydropower comprised around 5
units
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 in the beginning and will continuously remain steady
untill
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until
the
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2029, when
extremely
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the extremely
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 insignificant rise in Nuclear and Solar energies is expected.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, gas, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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