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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the rate of individuals by old
age
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 group in one unknown city who used
bikes
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 in 2011 .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the community aged between 0 and 9 used
bicycles
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 more than the other
age
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 groups back in 2011. With regard to the population who rode
bicycles
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 by their
age
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 are percentage over 20% for each gender. The highest
age
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 group for using
bikes
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 back in
this
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 time were 0-9
years
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 old with about half of the women
as well as
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 half of the men but the female percentage was slightly higher than the male ratio .The second most common group that utilised
bicycles
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 in 2011 was individuals aged 10-17 .
However
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, in
this
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 aged category, the female percentage was roughly doubled the male proportion . Turning to the bodies who used
bikes
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 a proportion that was less than 20% for women and men in 2011 . Elderly people who aged over 60
years
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 old took the third most individuals rode
bicycles
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 in
this
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 data with 18.5% of females that were rode
bikes
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 compared to 13.2% of males who used
bicycles
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 .People who are 18-39
years
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 old were the second least
age
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 that utilised
bikes
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 in 2011 .The
last
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age
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 category is 40-59
years
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 old which are the fewest aged groups that use
bikes
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 as a transport method .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, bikes, bicycles, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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